Peer Review #5 (Rachel May)

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http://www.rachelmay755.wordpress.com/2016/04/22/blog-5/comment-page-1/#comment-45

Hey Rachel!

Your piece on Mary Gilmore’s “Eve-Song” was an enjoyable read. I personally like your analysis of the poem as it was utterly insightful and contextually relevant to the experiences of the woman in the early 19th Century. I appreciate your incorporation of textual analysis as I think that enhanced the consolidated and meaningful aspect of your analysis. The fluency of your piece was also wonderful because your writing was grammatically correct and free from spelling mistakes. Overall, your precision in selecting quotes and ability to explain them thoroughly have shone through your analysis. Great work on your analysis, I look forward to seeing more posts from you!

 

Week 7 Blog- Critical

1/ Discuss the significance of the last line of John Shaw Neilson’s “The Orange Tree” 

This week, we explored early 20th-century Australian poetry and prose. This included the works of poet John Shaw Neilson. Specifically, I wanted to examine Neilson’s beautiful poem “The Orange Tree”. This extremely sensitive poem involves considerable educational enquiry into the perceptions of a child and an adult. The poem is a dialogue between a child, who is a symbolic representation of youth, and an adult, who is a symbolic representation of sophistication. In this poem, Neil criticises the “sophisticated” adult mind and its need to identify, categorise and evaluate essentially everything in life. His depiction of the “sophisticated” mind is juxtaposed with the child through alternating stanzas. For example, the poem begins with the “sophisticated” adult’s perspective of the Orange Tree:

 

THE young girl stood beside me. I

Saw not what her young eyes could see:

—A light, she said, not of the sky

Lives somewhere in the Orange Tree.

 

Neil then follows up with two additional stanzas to convey the “sophisticated” mind’s need to identify, categorise and evaluate “everything”.

 

—Is it, I said, of east or west?

The heartbeat of a luminous boy

Who with his faltering flute confessed

Only the edges of his joy?

 

Was he, I said, borne to the blue

In a mad escapade of Spring

Ere he could make a fond adieu To his love in the blossoming?

To his love in the blossoming?

 

The “sophisticated” mind’s attempt to analyse and evaluate the child and what the child was referring to. This action ultimately drives the child into a state of frustration and as a consequence, the child emphatically utters the words “–Listen!”. This can be interpreted as the child’s frustration at adults to unnecessarily complicate things in life and just observe (or in this case, listen.)

 

Plague me no longer now, for I Am listening like the Orange Tree.

 

Hence, we can argue that the last line’s the poem (shown above) is significant in the sense that it encourages people, specifically adults, to free themselves from their own self-restrictions and in doing so, they are able to understand and feel something beyond what can ever be understood from identifying, catergorising and evaluating.

 

 

Peer Review #5 (Raina Ebrahim)

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http://www.rainaebrahim.wordpress.com/2017/08/30/blog-3-what-is-significant-about-emily-dickinson/comment-page-1/#comment-15

Hey Raina,

I thoroughly enjoyed reading your piece on the significance of Emily Dickinson. I, too, personally think that Emily Dickinson’s values for woman’s rights and equality are reflected through her poetry. Emily Dickinson definitely conveys how powerful and impactful mere words can be. I also found it insightful that you provided an analysis of Emily Dickinson’s writing style to consolidate your opinion. To improve your piece, I think you should link your ideas to the question more often throughout your response. Otherwise, I think you did a wonderful job. Keep up the great work!

Week 7 Blog- Critical

1/ Write a paragraph that says succinctly which of the two Roberts you preferred and for what reasons.

This week, we learnt about two iconic North American poets: Robert Frost (1874-1963) and Robert Lowell (1917-1977). I personally prefer Robert Frost because his poems are philosophical and it echoes the significance of nature and its heavenly power to transcend the human spirit. Similar to Ralph Waldo Emerson (an influential American writer of the nineteenth century who inspired nonconformity, self-reliance, and anti-institutionalism), he encourages his readers to appreciate the extraordinary in the ordinary. Since Robert Frost was an “inheritor of the transcendentalist”, many transcendentalist values are reflected through his expression in his poems. Robert Frost’s poem “The Road Not Taken” and “Directive” are two examples of his work which reflect transcendentalist values. Ultimately, Robert Frost’s “The Road Not Taken” and “Directive” are both examples of poems which encourages the ordinary man to be extraordinary by freeing himself from his own superficial barriers created from his mind.

 

 

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Peer Review #4 (Katie DeCarlo)

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http://www.katiedecarlo2.wordpress.com/2017/09/07/lousia-anne-meredith/comment-page-1/#comment-11

Hi Katie,

I really enjoyed reading your piece on Lousia Anne Meridith. You gave an insightful and skilful analysis on her style of writing and how it is used to portray the Australian landscape. I think your piece would have benefited if you did a summary towards the end as to how she spoke to you as a woman. Overall, it was a lovely piece of writing to read and I hope to see more from you!

 

Week 6 Blog- Creative

2/ CREATIVE Write a stanza of a poem in the style of Banjo Paterson.

‘He never drew a sober breath, he died without a will,

‘But he will do whatever it takes for his children’s mouths to fill.

‘At the end of a long and tiresome day,

‘He shall rest quietly upon the hay.’

 

Note: This stanza is inspired by Paterson’s poem “The Man Who Was Away”. The first line of this stanza came from his poem.

 

Peer Review #4 (Daniel David)

Link to comment: https://ddavid1818.wordpress.com/2017/09/05/literature-journal-blog-4-4/comment-page-1/#comment-87

Hey Daniel,

I personally think you did a great job on your analysis with the extract from Mark Twain’s “The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn”. Mark Twain’s prominent and masterful use of literary devices is evidently one of many aspects of his writing that assists him to “bring nature to life”. I particularly like your carefully chosen examples, how you paired it up with a literary device and a consolidated analysis to reinforce your idea that Mark Twain uses literary devices to bring nature to life. However, I’m rather disappointed that you did not elaborate more on your ideas because I really wanted to read more of your analysis. Other than that, keep up the good work! I look forward to seeing more posts from you.

 

 

Week 6 Blog- Critical

1/ DU BOIS “The problem of the Twentieth Century is the problem of the color-line”. What do you think Du Bois means? (p.885)

To get to the crux of what Du Bois means by his prescient statement “The problem of the Twentieth Century is the problem of the color-line” (885), we need to first consider the context of the term “color-line”. The term color-line was originally used as a reference to the racial segregation that existed in the United States of America after the abolition of slavery. By considering this small window of context, we can assume that he is referring to the racial segregation and tension that remains between white folk and black folk after the abolition of slavery. One may interpret this as Du Bois attempt to show “the strange meaning of being black (in) the Twentieth Century”. This prescient statement was featured in Du Bois book “The Souls of Black Folk”. This book was Du Bois attempt to abolish “the color-line” by conveying a  hidden truth to what it means to be black in a “white world”.

 

Peer Review #3 (Natalie Azzopardi)

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http://www.natalie4820.wordpress.com/2017/09/06/fruit-bats/comment-page-1/#comment-13

Hey Natalie,

I really enjoyed reading your piece on Lin Onus’s artwork titled “Fruit Bats”. It’s definitely a marvellous piece of art and I think you’ve made the art piece shine through with your in depth contextual analysis. Needless to say, your analysis of the sculpture was done well. Some constructive criticism would be to be careful of your possessive apostrophe (I noticed you wrote Lin Onus’ instead of Lin Onus’s). Otherwise, your piece was engaging and informative. I look forward to seeing more posts from you!

Week 5 Blog- Creative

3/ Try writing a stanza that uses the punchy rhythm of Kendall’s “Bell Birds”:

By channels of coolness the echoes are calling

And down the dim gorges I hear the creek falling;

Try this to discover whether the search for rhythm and musicality blocks or helps the flow of your ideas.

 

Birds

By channels of coolness the echoes are calling

And down the dim gorges I hear the creek falling;

It lives high above the cotton clouds and soars graciously in the silver sky

If you wish to see it, you must carefully keep watch with your intrigued eye

Endless fields of flowers bloom; Asteraceae, Araceae, Bombacaceae, and so much more

But that bird is the only thing that I could ever possibly adore.